A Perfect Ace – Flash Fiction For Aspiring Writers

This is the second week of Priceless Joy’s challenge, Flash Fiction for for Aspiring Writers. The challenge asks us to write a piece of fiction from the photo prompt provided in around 100- 150 words. It encourages participants to comment, constructively, on other entries, so supporting each other’s writing. If you’d like to join in with this challenge, follow the link in the title of PJ’s, blog: Beautiful Words. The challenge runs from Wednesday to Wednesday every week.

Here is this week’s photo, copyright Dawn Miller . . .


and this is my story . . .


David Jameson was sweating now. Two more points to his opponent and he could kiss the Regional Cup goodbye. Already two sets down, David served to save the match …

The ball bounced hard: a perfect ace.

‘Advantage Jameson,’ the umpire droned above the spectators’ gasps.  David served again.

Another ace brought further gasps.

‘Game and third set, Jameson.’ The words were music to David’s ears. His smug-faced opponent was older, more experienced – had taken the Cup for as long as David could remember. This year it was his turn.  He just needed to stay focused …

After some long rallies, superb lobs and backhand smashes over the next two sets, David emerged victorious.

‘Game, set and match, David Jameson,’ the umpire intoned as David’s opponent leapt the net to congratulate him.

‘Cup’s yours, son,’ Mike Jameson said, pride evident in his eyes. ‘Until next year …’

Word Count: 148

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About milliethom

I am a reader and writer of historical fiction with a keen interest in the Earth's history and all it involves, both physically and socially. I like nothing better than to be outdoors, especially in faraway places, and baking is something I do when my eyes need respite from my computer screen.
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35 Responses to A Perfect Ace – Flash Fiction For Aspiring Writers

  1. Wow – perfect Millie! You obviously know a lot about tennis (I don’t). This story was great!

  2. Sport being the competitive animal it is Millie there is always the glory of victory until the next challenge emerges. Lovely piece of writing.

  3. married2arod says:

    What a nice story about determination and how it’s not as hard to get the top as it is to stay at the top. I thought you did a good job of building the story as well.

  4. scrapydotwo says:

    I love the end when the son wins but next year he is going to compete again against his dad. Well written.

  5. Very well written. The pace is great, and it kept me wondering what was going to happen next. I agree with married2arod that it shows where determination can lead you.

  6. Aquileana says:

    I love the prompt for this challnege and your brief story is great… The last sentence is absolutely conclusive…All the best to you. Aquileana 😎

  7. Your last lines always make me smile… 🙂
    Another amazing fiction’s dose! I love reading your stories ❤
    On a side note, I've started writing from today, so hopefully I'll participate in this… 🙂

  8. Sam Rappaz says:

    Wonderfully crafted Millie. I really enjoyed this. 🙂

  9. Sonya says:

    “His smug-faced opponent was older, more experienced – had taken the Cup for as long as David could remember.” Brilliant how you set up the revelation with that line. The rivalry is great, I bet these two will be at it year after year…

  10. Mara Fields says:

    Nice piece Millie. You know what I liked a lot? The dichotomy you set up between the pace and action of the tennis, and the umpire who seems half-interested at best. It really made the tension between the players greater, having an “intoning” ump as a foil to their frenzy.

    • milliethom says:

      I think that happens in a lot of real tennis matches. The monotone voices of umpires often seem at odds with the action. Still, I suppose it’s better than the ridiculous hysterics of some soccer commentators on TV. Thank you for the nice comment, Mara. 🙂

  11. Not a big fan of tennis, but your lovely story got me interested 😉 Well done Millie! 🙂

  12. I don’t know much about tennis either. I like how you wrote about it, that was a fun read.

  13. This was written by a tennis player. 😉 Nice work.

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