El Lobo – Mondays Finish the Story

This is my third week of taking part in the flash fiction writing challenge, Mondays Finish the Story, hosted by Barbara Beacham. The challenge involves writing a story of 100-150 words from the photo and first line prompt kindly provided by the host.

Here is this week’s photo . . .


. . . and this is my story, incuding the first line prompt:

She was unaware that she was being watched as she focused on the mail coach careering down the narrow valley. The rockfall would soon be within their sights and the screeching of wheels and whinnying horses would be her cue to move out. She grinned, anticipating the payrolls soon to be hers.

Townsfolk called her El Lobo. The Wolf. She liked that. It amused her that the fools assumed her to be a man. They knew her as Kitty, the pretty, young schoolteacher, all dimples and smiles. She’d honed her skills well over the years, knew exactly how to stalk her prey, target the weakest amongst them. They deserved no better, after all, for hanging her father. The first El Lobo

She adjusted her mask and spurred her restless stallion into motion. Then the shot rang out and she dropped like a felled beast.

The sheriff smiled. El Lobo had been unaware that she was being watched.

Word Count: 149


About milliethom

I am a reader and writer of historical fiction with a keen interest in the Earth's history and all it involves, both physically and socially. I like nothing better than to be outdoors, especially in faraway places, and baking is something I do when my eyes need respite from my computer screen.
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19 Responses to El Lobo – Mondays Finish the Story

  1. Glad you didn’t take the picture-prompt literally 🙂

    Sad she didn’t succeed 😦

  2. babso2you says:

    Excellent story! Thank you for taking part in this week’s challenge! Stay tuned for the next… ^..^

  3. Mara Fields says:

    Lovely skew on the expected, Millie! I have to say, I liked this one better than the more literal take…but you know, that’s me. I like posts a little off-center! Nice job!

    • milliethom says:

      Thank you, Mara. I haven’t looked at anyone else’s yet, so I don’t know who’s done what. I’m guessing yours won’t be on the literal side! I was late doing mine last night and too tired to start reading.
      Thank you again for the kind comment.

      • Mara Fields says:

        I didn’t end up doing one this week. 😦 I think I’ve got something for the Grammar Ghoul competition though, if I can get it finished this evening…

  4. penshift says:

    Just what I need at 2 in the morning; a dash of excitement. Fun short. 🙂

  5. draliman says:

    Ha, not as clever as she thought she was, then 🙂

  6. Another impressive short story! ❤ I had a lot of fun reading it 😉

  7. Wow! Nice Millie! Though I’m feeling bad for her… Thanks for sharing this story dear ❤

  8. Great twist at the end of a good story. Looks like her ego got the better of her. They’ll be looking for anothr school teacher. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne

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