Teamwork – Monday’s Finish the Story

It’s time for Monday’s Finish the Story again. This is a flash fiction challenge which asks that we write a story in 150 words from the picture and first line prompt, kindly provided by the  host, Barbara W. Beacham.

Here is this week’s photo . . .


. . . and this is my story, including the first line prompt:

When the team heard the dam explode, they knew they had limited time to make it to safety. 

Dave made the split-second decision that offered his team the only hope of survival. Ahead lay the series of rapids they’d been preparing to negotiate: too late now to escape the river’s fast-flowing pull. Behind them the raging dam waters neared.

‘Blades down!’ he yelled from the helm, thrusting his paddle into the billowing foam. ‘We’re in this together, so control this baby!’

The raft plunged over the dip … straight into the clutches of violent eddies that sent them spinning into jagged rocks. The raft tilted perilously and water swamped the craft. Two men momentarily disappeared, only practised survival skills preventing them from being swept into the suds.

They hit the pool mere yards from the bank as the deafening roar reached the dip.

‘Swim for it!’ Dave yelled.

‘Great teamwork, guys,’ Greg hollered down as they scrambled up the bank. Sound effects OK? River rescue practice tomorrow …’

Word count: 150

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47 thoughts on “Teamwork – Monday’s Finish the Story

  1. Great take Millie, you took me with you on the journey down the river and thru the bumps and perils then I had to read the ending twice having thought….What? Very well done.

    1. I’m trying hard to break the addiction, Heath, so stop encouraging me! Hehe. Thank you for liking them, though – which just encourages me more! 🙂

  2. Great teamwork they get a star and since you are the coach of the team you get this 🙂 What an interesting turn towards the end. What a relief.

    1. Ah … where would we be if our Rescue Services didn’t train? (Mind you, I doubt if they’d ever have a simulated dam burst to deal with!) I’m very pleased you like the story, though, 🙂

  3. I worked myself up and a sigh of relieve – it was only a practice and not the real one. Well written

    1. Thank you so much for the link! I’m glad you’ve decided to take part in some of these challenges. It will be good to read your stories – and they are really good practice. 🙂

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