One Last Run – Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers

Flash Fiction for for Aspiring Writers is a writing challenge, kindly hosted by Priceless Joy. The challenge asks us to write a piece of fiction from the photo prompt provided in around 100- 150 words. It encourages participants to comment, constructively, on other entries, so supporting each other’s writing. If you’d like to join in with this challenge, follow the link in the title of PJ’s, blog: Beautiful Words to see what to do. The challenge runs from Wednesday to Wednesday every week.

Here is this week’s photo . . .

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. . . and this is my story:

Mickey Riordan passed the security officers supervising the boarding passengers at the top of the Bavaria’s gangplank, and grinned. He’d done it again! This final stop at Cologne, one of the Rhine’s many ports, had resulted in his fifth little bag of diamonds.

Back in his cabin he locked the bag in the safe with the rest, all to be delivered to the ‘big boys’ once they’d docked in Amsterdam. Then it was off to the airport for his homebound flight. With the payoff from his third and last ‘run’ he’d be able to buy that big house with the swimming pool in London.

Contemplating a hot shower, the knock on the door startled him. Probably the steward with the extra towels he’d ordered …

‘Mr. Riordan?’ one of the two burly policemen asked.

Mickey nodded, visualising the next ten years in clink. He could kiss that posh house goodbye.

Word Count: 150

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25 thoughts on “One Last Run – Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers

  1. Sounds like he should have stopped at two “runs”. That’s the problem with the criminal class today. Very greedy 🙂
    I’m betting the “big boys” in Amsterdam aren’t going to be too happy with him either.

  2. Mickey was a bit too greedy, he should have gone for a smaller house, I reckon. But I’m glad you didn’t let him get away with it, he was too sure of himself…

  3. I would say that nothing last forever… It is hard to be a fugitive of the Law, I guess…
    Nicely penned, dear Mollie ⭐ happy weekend! love, Aquileana 😀

      1. Well, at least he wasn’t violent. I suppose all he wanted was to settle down with his dream house. Perhaps he aimed just a little bit too high … 🙂

  4. WOW! Well, Mickey did buy himself into a big house with interesting roommates, great security, out-of-this-world chefs, a basketball court (possibly), an indoor and outdoor gym, and a large shower room. -(O.O)-

  5. Bad guys always seem to dream far ahead that they don’t realize they might get caught too soon. Very nice ending, he sure wasn’t going anywhere after opening the door.

  6. What I loved most about this was the details. By giving a last name to your character and all the little details you were able to put into so little words really gave it a clear picture.

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