Wine and Women – Monday’s Finish the Story

It’s time to have a go at Monday’s Finish the Story. This is a flash fiction challenge which asks that we write a story in 150 words from the picture and first line prompt provided by the host, Barbara W. Beacham.

Here is this week’s photo . . .


. . . and this is my story, including the first line prompt:

On March 9th, 2015, three objects were reportedly seen in the skies over the Borracho Todos los Tiempos Vineyards.

Harry Hobson attempted to focus on the lights moving across the pre-dawn sky, unable to decide whether there were five flying saucers or three, and took another swig from his near-empty bottle.

‘What d’ya make of them, Fred?’ he asked the figure slumped beside him against the boulder. ‘D’ya think we’s bein’ invaded?’

Fred belched, opening his heavy eyelids a fraction.’ Nah’, he slurred. ‘Wars bin over more’n sixty years.’

‘A wa’n’t thinkin’ o’ Jerries, Fred. Them’s flying saucers …’

Fred wobbled to his feet and stared up at the sky. ‘Hoo cares about saucers – and we ain’t on ’oliday to look at lights. Wine and women’s all I …’

Harry watched, agog, as Fred drifted up into the sky, surrounded by a bright beam of light. Bleedin’ typical of Fred to go off without him.

‘Make sure yer back afore the vineyard store opens at ten,’ he yelled.

Word Count: 150

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About milliethom

I am a reader and writer of historical fiction with a keen interest in the Earth's history and all it involves, both physically and socially. I like nothing better than to be outdoors, especially in faraway places, and baking is something I do when my eyes need respite from my computer screen.
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39 Responses to Wine and Women – Monday’s Finish the Story

  1. babso2you says:

    A very well done take on the prompt and opening Millie! I loved this story! You had both me and my husband laughing! Thank you for participating again, and I hope to see you back next week! Be well… ^..^

  2. I of July says:

    OK now this is good… on point. Laughs, Mystery, the lot. The dialogue is done so well I can hear them talk 🙂

    • milliethom says:

      Well, I thought I’d try a bit of dialect again today, Heath. I’m a Lancashire lass, when all’s said and done. I’m really glad it appealed to you. Thank you. 🙂

  3. lrod1726 says:

    Loved your story! It was so fun and I can picture both of the men talking to each other. The ending had me laughing, great job! 🙂

  4. Sonya says:

    ‘Bleedin’ typical of Fred …’ – that made me laugh. Great dialogue, great ending. You’ve created a nice dynamic between these two – they must have been friends for a long time because they remind me of an old, married couple 🙂

    • milliethom says:

      Thank you, Sonya. I can definitely see what you mean about the dynamic between Fred and Harry. I don’t suppose they’ll ever see each other again … Sob, sob … 🙂

  5. This was such a funny story… I loved the dialogue, and agree with Sonya – that line was priceless! Great job….

  6. draliman says:

    Very amusing. I love their rather casual attitude to everything that’s happening 🙂 I bet not even aliens will be able to keep Fred from opening time.

  7. John Yeo says:

    Superb story~ The two characters blend so well ~ I was in awe of the way you brought them to life with the dialect ~ Very well written Millie 🙂

  8. Millie, this is wonderful! I LOVE it! I could just see these two men having this conversation and Fred floating up to the flying saucer. Hahaha! This is why you are an author!

  9. giffmacshane says:

    And here I am wondering if the whole thing wasn’t just a hallucination … Well done!

  10. pearlz says:

    Love this. Speech is well captured.

  11. I like this Millie. The notion of being lifted into the spaceship is an avenue into a whole new story as it sets our minds a wonder at what happens when you get there. I love your use of dialogue.

  12. Norma says:

    I enjoyed the story but the best part were – the dialogues.

  13. I had a good laugh reading this story 😀 You well captured how two guys would normally talk to each other in a hilarious way. 😉 You nailed it again Millie ❤

  14. Susan Langer says:

    Liked your story, Millie. You had me lol at the end.

  15. scrapydotwo says:

    I can see and hear these two bickering over lights that they do not know where they come from and then where they go to. Wonder if they will remember it the next day?

  16. Tastyniblets says:

    That was great Millie! That’s the right attitude to have over an alien invasion :p

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