It’s time to have a go at Monday’s Finish the Story. This is a flash fiction challenge which asks that we write a story in 150 words from the picture and first line prompt provided by the host, Barbara W. Beacham.
Here is this week’s photo . . .
. . . and this is my story, including the first line prompt:
On March 9th, 2015, three objects were reportedly seen in the skies over the Borracho Todos los Tiempos Vineyards.
Harry Hobson attempted to focus on the lights moving across the pre-dawn sky, unable to decide whether there were five flying saucers or three, and took another swig from his near-empty bottle.
‘What d’ya make of them, Fred?’ he asked the figure slumped beside him against the boulder. ‘D’ya think we’s bein’ invaded?’
Fred belched, opening his heavy eyelids a fraction.’ Nah’, he slurred. ‘Wars bin over more’n sixty years.’
‘A wa’n’t thinkin’ o’ Jerries, Fred. Them’s flying saucers …’
Fred wobbled to his feet and stared up at the sky. ‘Hoo cares about saucers – and we ain’t on ’oliday to look at lights. Wine and women’s all I …’
Harry watched, agog, as Fred drifted up into the sky, surrounded by a bright beam of light. Bleedin’ typical of Fred to go off without him.
‘Make sure yer back afore the vineyard store opens at ten,’ he yelled.
Word Count: 150
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39 thoughts on “Wine and Women – Monday’s Finish the Story”
A very well done take on the prompt and opening Millie! I loved this story! You had both me and my husband laughing! Thank you for participating again, and I hope to see you back next week! Be well… ^..^
Thank you, Barbara! I’m glad you liked my little tale. 🙂
OK now this is good… on point. Laughs, Mystery, the lot. The dialogue is done so well I can hear them talk 🙂
Well, I thought I’d try a bit of dialect again today, Heath. I’m a Lancashire lass, when all’s said and done. I’m really glad it appealed to you. Thank you. 🙂
Loved your story! It was so fun and I can picture both of the men talking to each other. The ending had me laughing, great job! 🙂
Thank you so much for that lovely comment. I’m really gald you though it was funny. 🙂
‘Bleedin’ typical of Fred …’ – that made me laugh. Great dialogue, great ending. You’ve created a nice dynamic between these two – they must have been friends for a long time because they remind me of an old, married couple 🙂
Thank you, Sonya. I can definitely see what you mean about the dynamic between Fred and Harry. I don’t suppose they’ll ever see each other again … Sob, sob … 🙂
This was such a funny story… I loved the dialogue, and agree with Sonya – that line was priceless! Great job….
Thank you John! I really felt like writing somethig more amusing than dramatic today, so I’m really glad you liked it. 🙂
Very amusing. I love their rather casual attitude to everything that’s happening 🙂 I bet not even aliens will be able to keep Fred from opening time.
Probably not. 🙂
Superb story~ The two characters blend so well ~ I was in awe of the way you brought them to life with the dialect ~ Very well written Millie 🙂
Thank you, John. I really love playing around with dialects. I think they add to the humour. I’m glad you liked it. 🙂
Millie, this is wonderful! I LOVE it! I could just see these two men having this conversation and Fred floating up to the flying saucer. Hahaha! This is why you are an author!
Thank you for that great comment, PJ. I couldn’t think of much that was actually serious for this prompt. It seemed to just lend itself to humour. 🙂
You did an excellent job with the humor! I loved it! I think of it and still get a chuckle.
Thank you! 🙂
And here I am wondering if the whole thing wasn’t just a hallucination … Well done!
Thank, Gifford – a much appreciated comment. 🙂
Love this. Speech is well captured.
Thank you, Pearlz. Your comment is much appreciated.
I like this Millie. The notion of being lifted into the spaceship is an avenue into a whole new story as it sets our minds a wonder at what happens when you get there. I love your use of dialogue.
Thank you for the nice comment, Michael. I’m glad you liked the dialogue. 🙂
You are most welcome, see you next week.
I enjoyed the story but the best part were – the dialogues.
Thank you for your nice comment, Norma. I do like using dialects. 🙂
I had a good laugh reading this story 😀 You well captured how two guys would normally talk to each other in a hilarious way. 😉 You nailed it again Millie ❤
I’m so pleased you enjoyed it, Khloe. I really enjoyed writing that one. 🙂
I loved it for sure 😉 Keep writing Millie! 🙂
I’m pleased you liked it, Khloe. 🙂
Liked your story, Millie. You had me lol at the end.
I can see and hear these two bickering over lights that they do not know where they come from and then where they go to. Wonder if they will remember it the next day?
That was great Millie! That’s the right attitude to have over an alien invasion :p
I’m not so sure they’d have the same attitude if they were sober. Thank you for liking the story, Az! 🙂
Well this was a much more entertaining attitude anyway 🙂