Forgive me

Here is my second contribution to Ermilia’s Picture It And Write Challenge. This is a weekly writing challenge, posted every Sunday, by the author of Emiliablog. The challenge asks that we write a paragraph of fiction, or a poem, in response to the photoprompt given.

Here is the photo prompt for this week . . .


… and here is my response to it:

It was not a night for driving, especially with the atmosphere in the Lexus like ice. Stephanie just sat there, her eyes following the sweep of the windscreen wipers as he told her about Marcelle.

He had desperately wanted her forgiveness, her understanding. It had been a one-night stand after all, not some long-lasting affair! A few too many drinks with the lads, some licentious talk.  Then those girls had come in, all short skirts and plunging necklines . . .

‘But I love you,’ Jonathan stressed, catching the glint of her tears in the headlights of oncoming cars. Her continued silence, combined with the frenzied sweeping of the wipers, was fraying his nerves. As they neared the junction with the busy road, the winking indicator displayed his intention to turn right. At a slight break in the traffic, he pulled out.

He didn’t notice Stephanie unclipping her seat belt, or reaching for the door. The first thing he knew, she had flung herself out. A passing car hit her . . .

‘Forgive me,’ he sobbed as the paramedics headed towards them in the glare of overhead lights.

‘And . . . cut.’ The director’s voice boomed across the set. ‘Take twenty. Then we roll on the scene in the morgue.’

About milliethom

I am a reader and writer of historical fiction with a keen interest in the Earth's history and all it involves, both physically and socially. I like nothing better than to be outdoors, especially in faraway places, and baking is something I do when my eyes need respite from my computer screen.
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15 Responses to Forgive me

  1. Hahaha, you got me. The scenes were too beautiful! I think you have watched too many movies. 😉

  2. I love the ending Millie. You had me going there!

    • milliethom says:

      Thank you, Tony! The writing challenges are fun, although I’m feeling really guilty about spending time on them instead of my book. As a writer yourself, I’m sure you know what I mean! They are good practice in being concise, And quite addictive, too. I’ll just have to do a few more . . . Haha.

  3. Yikes! Two twists! I like it.

  4. Wow what an amazing story! This post truly shows your writing talents!!! 🙂 It got me excited for the next challenge you take 😉

  5. You are a WOW writer!! Such high quality with searing imagination and superb ability to illustrate images with words 😀 I’m so glad I get your posts directly to my email!

    • milliethom says:

      WOW, Ashley, I’m really WOWED by your compliment. I think I might have it enlarged and framed! Hahaha. I’m so glad I get your posts in my email, too. They always pack such a punch! Have a great day.

  6. What a great story! At first I thought “a little predictable”, but then — WHAM BAM! comes the twist! Marvelous!

  7. talesbytink says:

    Fantastic story within a story. A good way to deal with the melodrama of it all…

    • milliethom says:

      I’m glad you liked the story, Tink, particularly the ending. It was intended to ‘lighten up’ the melodrama, as you have said. Thank you for your kind words.

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