Fifteen Yards and Panicking – Mondays Finish the Story

This is my second week of taking part in flash fiction writing challenges and I’m finding them quite addictive. (Who am I kidding? They’re totally addictive!) This challenge is Mondays Finish the Story, hosted by Barbara Beacham. It asks that we write a story of 100 -150 words from the photo and first line prompt -both kindly provided by the host.

Here is this week’s photo . . .


. . . and this is my offering, including the given opening sentence:

They finally made their escape.

The four by four slewed to the right as it rounded a tight bend, scouring the muddy bank with a screech of tyres before spluttering to a halt. Jack struggled to restart the engine then hit the throttle. The vehicle lurched forward, just as the beast rounded the bend.

At his side, Tom squinted at their pursuer. ‘Fifteen freakin’ yards and it’ll have us for a Scooby Snack!’

Jack shot him a venomous look. ‘The throttle’s already at its bleedin’ limit! What d’you expect me to do . . . crash the car, good and proper?’

The beast was on their offside now, all evil-eyed and roaring. Jack squeezed the throttle,  just as the T-rex hurled itself across the chassis, five yards from the finishing line.

Tom pressed another coin into the slot. ‘Two wins each and your “No Result”,’ he said, smirking. ‘And the last go is mine.’

Word Count: 149


About milliethom

I am a reader and writer of historical fiction with a keen interest in the Earth's history and all it involves, both physically and socially. I like nothing better than to be outdoors, especially in faraway places, and baking is something I do when my eyes need respite from my computer screen.
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30 Responses to Fifteen Yards and Panicking – Mondays Finish the Story

  1. babso2you says:

    Exciting story! And, you got me as I was not expecting the ending! Well done! Thank you for coming back again to write for Mondays! I hope that you return next week! Be well! ^..^

  2. afairymind says:

    Great story. 🙂 I love the ending – I was not expecting that!

  3. draliman says:

    Nice ending! I thought you’d gone all “Jurassic Park” on us there for a second 🙂

    • milliethom says:

      Hahaha. Funnily enough, that’s the way the story was heading until I had a sudden flash of inspiration – or, more likely, lunacy – as I was writing! Thank you for your nice comment, Ali.

  4. John Yeo says:

    A wonderful lead up to a brilliant ending~ Wow! I almost lost control there ~Superb writing Millie 🙂

  5. Mara Fields says:

    Really lively, and FUNNY. Loved it!

  6. Oh Danny Boy says:

    Lost of very descriptive action. Very cool!


  7. Susan Langer says:

    You had me going there, I was a fan of Jurassic Park movies and then you end it so well. Great surprise.

  8. Haha! Good one you had me going there with this tale!!

  9. I of July says:

    sharp description … very nice 🙂

  10. milliethom says:

    Thanks, Danny, I enjoyed writing it. I’m always fascinated by the many different responses to these prompts. That’s what makes it all so much fun!

  11. What a short exciting story! Very well written and descriptive!!! ❤

  12. Great story Millie, the ending surprised me too. Well done.

  13. Wonderful story Millie! Totally hilarious! You are really witty! 🙂

  14. EagleAye says:

    Ha! Tricky, tricky writer. You had me going there. That was fun. Great job!

  15. Great twist at the end, Millie. Good tension throughout. That’s some game. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne

    • milliethom says:

      Thank you, Suzanne. I’m glad you thought the game worked well. Computer games are definitely not my thing, so I just hoped it would read OK! At least it provided my ‘twist’.

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