This is my second week of taking part in flash fiction writing challenges and I’m finding them quite addictive. (Who am I kidding? They’re totally addictive!) This challenge is Mondays Finish the Story, hosted by Barbara Beacham. It asks that we write a story of 100 -150 words from the photo and first line prompt -both kindly provided by the host.
Here is this week’s photo . . .
. . . and this is my offering, including the given opening sentence:
They finally made their escape.
The four by four slewed to the right as it rounded a tight bend, scouring the muddy bank with a screech of tyres before spluttering to a halt. Jack struggled to restart the engine then hit the throttle. The vehicle lurched forward, just as the beast rounded the bend.
At his side, Tom squinted at their pursuer. ‘Fifteen freakin’ yards and it’ll have us for a Scooby Snack!’
Jack shot him a venomous look. ‘The throttle’s already at its bleedin’ limit! What d’you expect me to do . . . crash the car, good and proper?’
The beast was on their offside now, all evil-eyed and roaring. Jack squeezed the throttle, just as the T-rex hurled itself across the chassis, five yards from the finishing line.
Tom pressed another coin into the slot. ‘Two wins each and your “No Result”,’ he said, smirking. ‘And the last go is mine.’
Word Count: 149
30 thoughts on “Fifteen Yards and Panicking – Mondays Finish the Story”
Whoot !!! 🙂
Thank you, Alexander. I’m glad you had a laugh.
Exciting story! And, you got me as I was not expecting the ending! Well done! Thank you for coming back again to write for Mondays! I hope that you return next week! Be well! ^..^
I’m enjoying Mondays a lot, Barbara, so I really hope to be back again next week. Thank you for liking my story. I’m chuffed about that. Be well, too.
Great story. 🙂 I love the ending – I was not expecting that!
Thank you, Lou. It’s not often I can catch you out with an ending! I’ll head over and have a look at yours in a mo.
Nice ending! I thought you’d gone all “Jurassic Park” on us there for a second 🙂
Hahaha. Funnily enough, that’s the way the story was heading until I had a sudden flash of inspiration – or, more likely, lunacy – as I was writing! Thank you for your nice comment, Ali.
A wonderful lead up to a brilliant ending~ Wow! I almost lost control there ~Superb writing Millie 🙂
Really lively, and FUNNY. Loved it!
Lost of very descriptive action. Very cool!
You had me going there, I was a fan of Jurassic Park movies and then you end it so well. Great surprise.
Thank you, Susan. Oddly enough, I did start out to write some kind of Jurassic Park chase. I was halfway through when I decided to change it. I’m glad I did, too! It’s very nice to meet you, by the way.
Nice to meet you too. Following you on the reader BYW 🙂
I’m sure we’ll be chatting again soon. Keep posting and I’ll enjoy reading . . .
Haha! Good one you had me going there with this tale!!
Thank you, Amanda. I’m really enjoying having a go at flash fiction – it’s great fun. I’m glad you liked my story.
sharp description … very nice 🙂
Thank you, Heath. From someone with your descriptive talents, that is a lovely compliment!
Thanks, Danny, I enjoyed writing it. I’m always fascinated by the many different responses to these prompts. That’s what makes it all so much fun!
What a short exciting story! Very well written and descriptive!!! ❤
Great story Millie, the ending surprised me too. Well done.
Thank you for the lovely comment. I’ll be paying your story and a few others a visit tomorrow. I’m half asleep right now! Ha!
Wonderful story Millie! Totally hilarious! You are really witty! 🙂
Thank you Heena. I had fun writing it, too. 🙂
You’re welcome dear1 😀
Ha! Tricky, tricky writer. You had me going there. That was fun. Great job!
I’m glad you found it fun because it was a lot of fun to write! Thank you for enjoying it.
Great twist at the end, Millie. Good tension throughout. That’s some game. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne
Thank you, Suzanne. I’m glad you thought the game worked well. Computer games are definitely not my thing, so I just hoped it would read OK! At least it provided my ‘twist’.